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We walk among the hills at night
The two of us locked hand in hand;
I understand.
You are the source of my delight.
Cannot the moonlight last
Until the trials of daylight hours are past?
My lady, all that pains me so
When you are not here at my side
I can’t abide;
You give my hours a lovely glow,
My angel from on high,
Why you were sent, my love, I know not why.
God in His Heaven knew I craved
A fuller love, and then you came;
I’m not the same.
I’m in your thrall and I’m enslaved
And happiness is mine.
I crossed life’s desert just to drink your wine.
Intoxicated and redeemed,
I see a beauty everywhere;
‘Twas always there.
But without you these same things seemed
Less glorious and bright.
And that, my sweet, is why we stroll tonight.
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Well this makes my throat tight and my heart, in my chest, have that fluttering feeling, like when you are moved by something.
Lucky woman.
Is this the woman down the street? Beautiful music you could make, hee, hee (that is a voyeur's laugh). Good words.
edit - but you know what? It is not enough, what I said. This is truly beautiful. fluttering, fluttering.
Hey - do you know when I see your avatar I smile? Oh except when you are bad.
edit - I am smiling really big for what Adeline said.
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The line that struck me was "I crossed the desert just to drink your wine." An excellent image and a metaphor that sums up the entirety of the poem. This line curls around the lips.
Note that I dropped the adjective of "life's desert." That is more heavy-handed than needed.
I like the way you incorporate the concept of movement throughout the poem. "We walk among," "I crossed," "we stroll tonight." You've said "Life is a journey" without writing a bumper sticker. Nicely done.
I read this knowing that it is meant for a special woman, whose eyes will glow when she reads this. I see her smile, then turn away, respecting your privacy, as she reaches up to kiss you.
Hi. very poignant poem, deep emotions and passions. Lovely pictures words, vivid image like music to the hears, and sounds in the hearts. Great mind and dreams. Thanks for sharing.
I thinks its a good poem :)
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