why did u had to leave me when we were going so strong
was it u or did i do something wrong,
u have hurt me, u have given me pain u have made me cry
I get angry and ask myself why .
I remember the time when we were together,
my evenings were spent waiting for u
to hold u in my arms and there were
things that i wished to do,
ur teasing laugh still echos in my mind,
broken heart & shattered dreams this what u've left behind,
i remember the cold nights and lovely struggle
the warmth of ur body which brought me close to u
and snuggle,
But now ur gone these beautiful memories r erasing very fast
i pray to god that they would last.
Your body ur soul they r not mine,
ur thoughts occupy my dreams & every corner of my mind
sadly these r the only things that u've left behind.
DID U LIKE THIS, SHOULD I SUBMIT THIS IN COMPETITION.
PLEASE GIVE ME STAR IF U LIKE WHAT I HAVE WRITTEN.
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it's very nice I'd enter it if I were you
I think it could def. win a competition.
"i remember the cold nights and lovely struggle
the warmth of ur body which brought me close to u
and snuggle," that line made me smile. it's so silly. :)
I think you shouldn't use chat speak, like fix the grammar.
and then it'd be perfect for a competition.
The words are nice. But would do some serious editing to make it readable. The texting style grammar does not look good if you are going to enter it
I like it go 4 it i gave you a star by the way.
yes keep writing more and submit as many as possable
I'd enter it, but before you do you should fix your grammar, it'd help your chances.
I don't care for poems like that....they sound psycho and obsessive. Sorry
I love this.
You should submit it in a competition.
I like it a lot
Well.. it's nice .. Could be improved though .. But try your luck and submit it ! :)
It's actually good, and I usually don't like to read.XD