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Wow. I've seen some of your pieces, and they're cool, but this one, to me, is on another whole level. It's charming and mythical and bone-chilling. The whole image is completely unique, and unique images are ridiculously rare. Really, really good.

PS: I love the break after "unfair". The enjambment of "play unfair" and "unfair games" is much to my liking.

Three slight changes I would recommend:

There's an ancient meadow

where fairies play

unfair games of hide and seeking

bones they tore from travelers there.

Those who win tattoo their wings

with faces of those who lost

to remember how they looked

after they've paid their cost.

Risking their immortal lives

for some human beads they found—

yet, they forget the remnant bodies

rotting in the ground.

Otherwise, I like it a lot. very musical and interesting.

Well animated descriptive passages,

as this unique poem unfolds.

Good momentum and flow.

A chilling, unusual tale

which I detect subtle metaphors.

Original composing, Chase.

What came to mind - forgive me but it`s a compliment -

was, `This is one real ble*der of A Poem!`.

Well-imagined, not too subtly allegorical

regarding the general low cost placed on life,

good structure, no wasted words -

highly colourful contrastingly visual

and visceral

and altogether - a piece to be proud of **shivers**.

9

"Faeries are profound

-profoundly annoying"

"Faeries wings, formed of shifting light, emotion, and energy, are the manifestation of the power of those beings that transcend the mundane world"

Brian Froud

nice lyrics Chase Fire

nice image of faces tattooed on wings