Could u rate my poem? It´s called "How I lost Fayth".?
I was waiting for days and days,
just for that day,that perfect day,
when faith would allow me to be
brave to near fayth and thus release
the ache in my heart and the torture
bestowed upon my eyes by the
beauty of fayth by asking fayth if she
wanted to be something more than
mates.
Yet days and days passed and my
faith had yet not reached peak to near
fayth, until one day,that perfect day had
finally arrived and i decided to be more
brave and put my faith to the test only
to be stripped of all my faith by the news
that fayth had been taken away by a mate
who at the time seemed to me to be low in
faith but braver than me as he has left me
without my first true love fayth and wondering
on why faith in me arrived too late.
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It's not too bad I see were you are trying to go with it. I think you still need to dig a little deeper and make the poem more 3 dimensional instead of 2 dimensional. It's not that it's cliché or anything but still i know there is still room to expand this poem even further, and as long as you do that it will be a fine piece of work